Feedback: Just Be

[brandonnytrus]

Hey guys, I'm sorry for the whole no show last week, I was real busy with school.

Got my RP up for this week, anyone please feedback?

Thanks ;D

[Deleted]

Brandon the best advice i can give you is to choose describing things rather than using giant pictures. should give you more length and lets people get into the rp better because then they actually have to think and put themselves there.

[brandonnytrus]

Yeah, I got that. It makes sense. I was just trying to make a little more if a visual experience, you know?

[Rage]

I get what you were doing Brandon I liked it.

Bottom line is you're writing a wrestling promo and not a fantasy novel.

[brandonnytrus]

I get it. Makes sense. My bad.

[Deleted]

personally when i write an rp, I try and re-read it after as if I were someone else. Description is good...great in fact...as long as it's not over done. so if i read my own and find that maybe if I were someone else it would seem too boring, I cut back just a little. not to say that I thought yours was overly descriptive or boring. It's all about balance and I think your doing a pretty good job of that.

Just remember that you don't have to take every single piece of advice you get. I can speak from experience that criticism is something that can sometimes be hard to take....unfortunately you can't please everyone.

and I like pictures. I use them all the time when it fits. Not everyone likes them..but that's okay too. Just find your own style and roll with it.

I think you are doing a fantastic job and all your rps have just kept getting better, Congrats!!!

[brandonnytrus]

Thanks, Mandy, means a lot. I need to start to go full out with my RPs. They seem to have decreased in quality... But with R2G coming up... I need to be on my game.