Feedback: The Madness Within (Intro RP)

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I usually write longer once I get a storyline going, so if it seemed a tad short, that's probably why.

Let me know if this style seems like it would get old fast, that's my real concern with it, it was fun as hell to write, but it's a bit crazy to read. I tried being somewhat serious, but I like to write fun stuff, so I tried to balance it out (irony, ha!)

Anyway, I hold the belief that if you don't learn something from every RP, you're doing it wrong, so I would love to hear feedback on it.

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Only thing I would change is formatting. Having the red all the way left is hard to read at least for me.
Otherwise its a awesome start
Looking forward to more

[Deleted]

Yeah, that's what I was most worried about. I may end up dropping the whole triple-personality thing anyways, just wanted to give it a go before I used it in an RP that mattered. Live and learn.

[Deleted]

Well the triple personality is cool...if u can keep up with it it would be interesting

["Punk" Drake Hunter]

Dual personalities is fun, take it from me ;D But it's well done, i agree that the red on the side may be a bit hard to read but the whole thing was well done.

[gabegriffin]

Interesting concept and I like it, I agree the formatting gets a tad bit tedious but I think it was well done.

[MortyMan]

I love it thinks its awesome, love the personality thing, reminds me of Deadpool.... I do not really agree with the format thing I actually think it builds to the character and helps along the RP by clearly dividing the personalities