Feedback: Not My Intentions

[darkdisciple]

I feel like I've been drifting away from what Apostle was originally intended to be, and I didn't like where it was drifting, so I'm trying to get back to that point, as much as I know most of you are going to hate it. Doesn't matter, it's my character, ;D but I would appreciate feedback if any of you care. I feel like it's been a while since I actually wrote an RP, so I'm trying to build myself back towards the action oriented RP and less the inner thought. I sort of combined them here, but I'm going to try to work away from most of the thoughts and back to speaking and action.

[MortyMan]

I think you pulled it off, both that there was a good mixture of dialogue, thoughts and comedy.

And just because you mentioned it in the chat, I think you did a good job with the accent, I cant say what accent it is, but it gives the reader an idea of it.

thats it for now I think