Feedback on my First RP

[jordanstorm]

Hi

Any feedback on my first RP (in the introduction section) would be greatly appriciated

Please note that this is the style of RP that has made me successful in another online fed. Most of my RPs will not be this promo style, but I thought it would be a good starting point. My RPs will only improve from here

[MPW ADMIN]

Thought you did real well intro rps are tough to do but you went real good with it

[Emi's Imaginary Friend]

Looking forward to reading more from you. Good work!
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